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            The hook really worked for me. The way that he uses a story from his grandmother it was something a lot of people could relate to, almost everyone has a grandparent who tells the same story every time you get together.” I know just what story she would tell: in the mid-1920s, at the height of the Florida land rush, she was working in a real-estate office in Palm Beach. Times were flush and sales were booming”. It also gives just the right amount of back up information about what was going on during the time period of her story that she is always telling. ”I was raised on Depression stories; this was only one of many told around our dinner table”. The specific details that he used to tell this story I feel were needed. This piece had a lot of potential to turn into just a boring rendition of a memory from the olden days; but the way he wrote it was anything but that. “The women quilted and pressed laundry, stitched shoes and danced in burlesque shows. They took in boarders and delivered babies, and when their men ran out on them, they swallowed their pride and threw rent parties”. This was also some details that could help someone learn more about the time period in which the silver dollar story takes place.

Reaction to “I believe” essay.

       I really liked this essay. I wish i had the skills to be able to write likes this. I love the way she added things that didn’t really make sense but then were tied into the concept of her paper by the end. She didn’t use words that were the normal descriptive vocabulary someone would use. The way she wrote her essay was very free-flowing it was easy to listen to and didn’t have and paragraphs that felt out of place or that they didn’t relate back to her main topic sentence.  It was fun to he story about why she lives the way she does. It was a good combination of her personal life with her husband and her feelings towards the world. She was not pushy to try and make others feel the way she does but the way she describes her feelings could make someone be inspired to live the way she does.

Tomorrow

1. I think that he hooks the reader by really engaging them in his life. He talked about what he was going through he said that he heard his parents talking. Atomaticly i thought about what parents normally talk about and then he said its not what they normally talk about. He said it they were talking about an issue that would really effect his life.

2. He talks about what his dad is thinking about how his generation left the world for his sons generation. He goes to talk about topics that a lot of people are worried about right now.When people think about the bad things that are going on in the world right now people get emotional and want to try and solve them.

3.He uses his thoughts about what all we have gone through and not only the negative but also the positive. To every negative event there is a positive to fall after.

4. I think that he chose the title because this is how he See’s the future. His dad was thinking about what all the bad things that he was leaving behind. But the son was thinking about the positive as time goes on we will get better.

            My experience with writing has not been too good. When I write its doesn’t make sense to other people, but to me it does. I like writing but it is not one of my strong suits. I recently went to a life seminar and during this experience I was asked to write a letter to someone in my life that I was incomplete with. This was a letter that would potentially change my relationship with a very important person in my life. I decided to write a letter to my dad. After writing this paper/letter to him I wanted to make sure that I was able to get my point across. In the end it was a really good paper.

            Independently I don’t do any writing. I don’t usually express myself through any form of creative writing, poems, songs, or writing. I fell that this class is going to be great for me because its not so much learning new techniques about writing but its you one on one helping me with my writing teaching me how to improve or change my style.

         Previous teachers that I have had from my English classes have in my opinion fell short of really helping me with my writing. I feel that have given me great feed back on my writing pieces but I feel what I need is a critique of my long writing pieces. SO I feel this class will be great for me. When I write an essay and you grade it you will be able to get a really good feel of how I write and what I can improve on. 

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